Final draft reflection

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  • I think my final draft turned out well. Comparing it to my first draft, I'm happy with how I turned the essay around.
  • The main thing I focused on when revising was making paragraphs complete and adding more detail. I made sure to add topic and transition sentences to my body paragraph. I also added more imagery in the introduction.
  • For me, it was difficult adding enough detail to where it meets standards. I didn't know how to add more without sounding repetitive. I think finding the evidence was easy because I really believed in my thesis plus the thesis was truly about the poem.
  • I think my strengths are adding imagery and finding evidence to support my thesis. I think my weakness is elaborating. 
  • I don't really know. I had such a hard time with adding details that I don't know if I could add more. If I could, I definitely would.
  • I think I will get full points on turning it in on time, word count, creative title, title of poem in quotes, maybe capturing the readers interest because of the imagery in the introduction. My intro contains a thesis and I definitely think that the body paragraphs prove the thesis. 

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